Many people like to take pictures and they also modify those photos if they don’t look very well. In that condition, everybody wants to make them look beautifully so they sometimes use some software to make their pictures more pretty and good-looking.
I sometimes also do that to modify my photos but I just want them look more prettify. In addition, because the technology becomes more and more advanced now, we can make our photos more pretty. So, we can often see many people’s pictures sometimes look a little different from themselves.
Not only do we modify our own pictures but some sellers also do the same thing in order to make their goods look well.
However, maybe we shouldn’t take so serious on the picture of the merchandises in magazine because the picture that posed sometimes doesn’t exactly look the same as the real one.
Everyone all love seeing beautiful things but we can just “see”. Never take it too serious before you see the real.
Hi Oriana,
回覆刪除文意不錯，很隨興的感覺, which is OK. 但是你的排版是讓每一句都分開，這樣很像寫中文網誌，英文文章很少人這樣用，除非是詩的排版吧
So, the first thing you have to do is to 把sentences團結成段落, OK?
另外，把以下的錯誤更正:
1. Everybody all hope themselves look beautiful so they sometimes use some software to make their pictures more pretty and good-looking.
第一、hope的動詞形式不對
第二、這裏不該用反身代名詞themselves
2.I sometimes do that to modify my photos but I just want them look more abstract.
第一、請在前半段加個also, 或too
第二、你讓你的照片看起來像摘要(abstract)要幹嘛?要投稿讀者文摘嗎?
3. So, we can often see many people’s pictures sometimes look a little different from himself.
反身名詞對了，但單複數形錯了
4. Not only we modify our own pictures but some seller also do the same thing in order to make their goods look well.
第一、這一句的文用得真好，尤其是後半段
但還是有小缺點，如not only 開頭要倒裝
，而seller加s
5. Maybe we shouldn’t take so serious on the picture of the merchandises in magazine.
Sometimes, the picture that be posed doesn’t exactly as same as the real one.
這兩句文法架構也不錯oh,原來oriana的文法可以這麼好，但還是有小缺點
第一、be動詞形式錯誤
第二、doesn't後面少了動詞
第三、as same as的片語用錯了
6. Everyone all like to see beautiful things but we can just “see”. Never take it too serious before you see the real.
第一、like的動詞形式用錯
第二、這是一個很好的ending
改的不錯，除了這裡沒改對喔
回覆刪除1. Everybody all want himself look beautiful so they sometimes use some software to make their pictures more pretty and good-looking.
第一、want的動詞形式不對(不是"動詞用錯字"是形式不對)，要用wantSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
第二、這裏也不該用""""反身代名詞"""himself，要用"""""""受格"""""""him或her或them......
第三、把all拿掉