I was really amazed when the first time I heard that freshmen should get credits by doing the labor education. It’s not difficult for me to clean my environment but it’s difficult to do the job for giving up my ordinary plan.
Sometimes I don’t have any class in the morning but I have just only one stupid reason to get up early is to do the labor education. Additionally, in my lunch time, I couldn’t have my lunch immediately because of the stupid reason as well.
To be honest, sometimes I also though it is meaningful of the labor education because we make rubbish every day but have little time to clean our environment in the working day. In addition, we can know how hard it is for cleaner to keep our environment clearly.
On the contrary, I still don’t want to do it in regular because I don’t like to change my schedule and get up early for cleaning our school. Sometimes it could be so hard to clean out in such hot day.
Labor Education could be valuable experience for us to know keeping environment clearly sometimes is really difficult, but it could be really annoying as well.
And sometimes boring.
回覆刪除Hi Oriana,
回覆刪除"It’s not difficult for me to clean my environment but it’s difficult for me to do the job for giving up my ordinary plan."
這個論點很好 (雖有文法錯誤)，有些同學也想講同樣的意思但是他們沒有這樣鋪陳. Good job
其他如下:
1. I was really amazing when the first time I heard that freshmen should get credits by the labor education.
不是amazing是amazed
should的意思在這裏很畸形
改by doing the labor education
2. It’s not difficult for me to clean my environment but it’s difficult for me to do the job for giving up my ordinary plan.
把it's difficult for me 的邏輯順序修改一下
3. Sometimes I don’t have any class in the morning but I have just only one stupid reason to get up early is to do the labor education.
改: ...but I have only one stupid reason to get up early: to do the labor education.
4. However, in my lunch time, I couldn’t have my lunch immediately because of the stupid reason as well.
你的linking word用however接的不順暢；用 Additionally
5. On the contrary, I still don’t want to do it in regular because I don’t like to change my schedule and get up early for cleaning our school. Sometimes it could be so hard to clean out in such hot day.這一段感覺會是硬寫出多餘的一段
6. Labor Education could be value experience for us to know keep environment clearly sometimes is really difficult, but it could be really annoying as well.
用valuable
第二: keeping
By the way, I am glad that you tried to make this piece a well-organized one. Good job!
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