Last Thursday morning, I parked my motorcycle at the first parking lot at school as usual. I ordinary had a very wonderful and peaceful day until I finished my last class and labor education. I walked to the parking lot on a good mood, preparing to have a lunch with my friends.
Unfortunately, something annoying and unbelievable just had happened. Did I mistake? Or did my eyes have any problems? I couldn’t believe my eyes. There are some images in my sight: one red paper on the head of my motorcycle and the most unbelievable thing was the wheels were chained by a big lock! They said freshmen were not allowed to park at the first parking lot. For this reason, I paid 100 dollars!
However, it never rains but it pours. When I was going to leave from school, I slipped and fell over from the stairway.
What a lucky day!
Poor Oriana, it's indeed an unbelievably bad day. I'm sorry.
回覆刪除Yet, I also feel awful that I have to point out the grammar mistakes I found in your writing. Please don't hate me.
對了，你的這一篇unbelievably短喔，有混的嫌疑
1. Last Thursday morning, I parked my motorcycle at first parking lot at school as usual.
==>...at the first parking lot
2. It ordinary was a very wonderful and peaceful day until I finished my last class and labor education.
==>這裡的寫法其實和上一句的時間銜接是有問題的，主要因為這一句的英文在意思上和時間上是跟上一句合不來的
3. I waked to the parking lot on a good mood, preparing to have a lunch with my friends.
有一個字拼錯
4. Did I mistake? Or did my eyes have any problems? I couldn’t believe my eyes.
寫得不錯
5. There are some images came to my sight: one red paper on the head of my motorcycle and the most unbelievable thing was the wheels were chained by a big lock!
==>: there are some images came to my sight有文法錯誤，就是那個大家錯了三萬七千八百多次的there are...+V...的這個老到不能再老的老錯誤中的老錯誤的老老老老錯誤，請修正，謝謝:D
6. They said freshmen were not allowed to park at first parking lot.
==>...at First Parking Lot專有名詞或 at the first parking lot
7. For this reason, I paid for 100 dollars!
pay $ for 物
pay $ to 人
所以這裡不用for
8. However, misfortune never singly comes.
哈哈哈...你是想讓我笑死嗎? 請查證後再寫. :D
9. When I was going to leave from school I slipped and fell over from the stairway.
Poor girl...少了一個標點符號
吼喲JOHN很機耶!!! 笑什麼!!! 我也覺得那句怪怪的....
回覆刪除被你發現我掰不出話來了哈哈哈哈哈